Comments on: Fiction Friday

By: Bob-kat

Bob-kat — Sat, 20 Dec 2008 22:39:31 +0000

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Love the cartoon at the top of your blog. I never knew the creative process was so painful

By: Monica A

Monica A — Sat, 20 Dec 2008 19:30:11 +0000

Netchick sent me to say hi!
I enjoyed this! As I was reading this, I could see the puzzled expressions as I tried to imagine what it was he was possessed to buy her.

Monica

By: colleen

colleen — Sat, 20 Dec 2008 04:11:46 +0000

Or is it the kind of pitcher you can pour from? I can see this as a cartoon.

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By: Rob

Rob — Sat, 20 Dec 2008 02:41:43 +0000

Having been one of those athletes who tried to do the art show thing (I was a pitcher, actually)… this one hit home nicely. I am absolutely certain that a number of people had this very conversation about a gift I made or gave! (Them: is it an ash tray or a coffee mug? Me: No, it’s a cookie jar, duh!)

Very good work with the dialogue to tell the whole story.

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Sat, 20 Dec 2008 00:07:27 +0000

Short and sweet. I love the snappy dialogue that gets to the crux of the story. I particularly love the idea of a bunch of football dudes wandering around an art gallery show/opening.

That’s love for you!

And I never considered (until I just read Tammi’s comment) the double meaning of pitcher. Aussie sensibilities I guess.

By: Tammi

Tammi — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 21:44:32 +0000

I love these dialogues. I get such vivid pictures…I love the clever use of language, especially “pitcher”.

By: mw

mw — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 21:12:59 +0000

Lots of implied backstory – I like it. And, I’m pretty sure it’s not a pitcher.

Thanks!

By: Bob-kat

Bob-kat — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 16:52:12 +0000

I’m trying to imagine what this object d’art actually looks like and I’m getting a Darli-esque picture in my head! Loved the ‘object duh art’. Sounds like something Homer might say

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